Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope emphasize that I heard a lot of positive reviews about the work you have been doing in
this
letter finds you well.I am writing to enquire about taking membership in your sports club
.
My name is Kartik Velede working as a software developer for Kubra which is located in Ontario. Apart from being a programmer, I have also
playing
cricket for India A since childhood.
Regarding my interest in joining your sports facility, I would likeChange the verb form
played
Add the particle
to
this
industry for young athletes. I also
came to know that , you were able to produce 100's
of cricketers for Change noun form
hundreds
Indian
team from your facility. Correct article usage
the Indian
Therefore
, I was so excited to join the club
,
and train under your guidance for my upcoming tournament.
Remove the comma
apply
Moreover
, I would like to get some information about the cost of one-year
membership. Add an article
a one-year
Additionally
, by visiting the club
website it shows that there is a modern gym facility is
present within the Unnecessary verb
apply
club
. Does access to the gym cover under my membership? Is there any extra cost involved in having a personal trainer?
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Kartik Velede.Submitted by karthik.veledy on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and make use of varied linking words to enhance cohesion.
task achievement
Try to use a more consistently formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding contractions and maintaining a polite, respectful language.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite