Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
letter finds you well.I am writing to enquire about taking membership in your sports
club
. My name is Kartik Velede working as a software developer for Kubra which is located in Ontario. Apart from being a programmer, I have
also
playing
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cricket for India A since childhood. Regarding my interest in joining your sports facility, I would like
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emphasize that I heard a lot of positive reviews about the work you have been doing in
this
industry for young athletes. I
also
came to know that , you were able to produce
100's
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of cricketers for
Indian
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team from your facility.
Therefore
, I was so excited to join the
club
,
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and train under your guidance for my upcoming tournament.
Moreover
, I would like to get some information about the cost of
one-year
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membership.
Additionally
, by visiting the
club
website it shows that there is a modern gym facility
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present within the
club
. Does access to the gym cover under my membership? Is there any extra cost involved in having a personal trainer? I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Kartik Velede.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and make use of varied linking words to enhance cohesion.
task achievement
Try to use a more consistently formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding contractions and maintaining a polite, respectful language.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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