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Band 4.5

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company,which took place in a local hotel.in their feedback,participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel,but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel.In your letter *say what the participants liked about the hotel. *Explain why they were unhappy about the food. *suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to discuss about
last
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 month held the meeting at your
hotel
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.I am going to give feedback about
quality
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the quality
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 of the
hotel
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 service and about facilities. Your
hotel
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 service was
a
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apply
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good enough to compare to another
hotel
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.
The serving
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Serving
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food
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 at
right
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the right
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 time without delay is fine.Your
hotel
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 architecture is well to feel pleasant.The CCTV coverage was nice in your
hotel
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.The sound system that I used for
meeting
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the meeting
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 is good.I think you are developing your
hotel
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 with the help of
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robot
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a robot
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.
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While the
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The
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food
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was serving
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served
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 by the
robot
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is
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was
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 well.I held the meeting at your
hotel
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 meeting hall is covered by
sound
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a sound
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 system and
A/c
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the A/c
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 facilities are fine. My company
member's
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members
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 had
food
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 at your
hotel
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 having some uncomfortable with their stomach.That meal was served by
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robot
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the robot
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 is fine.But the quality of that
food
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 is not enough boiled.They were not boiled well.For
whiite
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white
 meal,they were added calcium to increase the look and colour of the rice.So you have to monitor
chef
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the chef
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 robustly by using
supervisor
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the supervisor
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,
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robot
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the robot
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 and
through
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apply
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CCTV coverage. I hope
this
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given
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gives
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a
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you a
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good idea to develop your
hotel
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 ratings. Thanking You, yours sincerely,

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear and logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and sign-offs for formal letters.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a single idea per paragraph to keep the content clear and organized.
task achievement
Address all points given in the prompt in a clear and detailed manner.
task achievement
Use a tone that is suitable for formal correspondence, avoiding informal language and contractions.
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