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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map below compares the original plan of a
museum
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 in 1998 and after adjustment in 2008.
Overall
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, except for the ticket entrance/exit and the permanent exhibition rooms, the rest parts of the
museum
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 changed in 2008.
According to
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 the information shown on the map, there were additional fountains and a cafe sitting area in the garden after changes were made in 2008. Compared to 1998, the shop was bigger as the restroom was moved to be beside the cafe.
Moreover
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, the temporary exhibition room had a larger space after relocating from the side next to the ticket entrance/exit to the garden. What should be particularly mentioned is that there was an extra restaurant near the cafe in the arrangement of 2008.
To sum up
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, after rearranging the setting of the
museum
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 in 2008, the majority of the facilities were enhanced in spaces.
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, the garden
upgraded
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 by decorating with fountains and most revisions in the plan happened on one particular side of the
museum
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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