The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
number
of males and females who are making higher degree
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degrees
fulltime
or part-time in Britain.
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full-time
Overall
, the highest value in graph
belongs to the females studying part-time. Correct article usage
the graph
In between
1970 and Change preposition
Between
1991
the Add a comma
1991,
number
of females steadily increased in both education
type
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types
while
males fluctuated.
In detail, the number
of women that have fulltime
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full-time
education
and part-time education
continualy
increased between 1970 and 1991. Correct your spelling
continually
While
the number
of woman
studying part-time Fix the agreement mistake
women
were
nearly 700.000 in 1970, it Correct subject-verb agreement
was
become
1.100.000 in 1990. Wrong verb form
became
Also
, the amount
of women having full-time Change the quantifier
number
education
were
nearly 90.000 which is the minimum value on Correct subject-verb agreement
was
whole
graph, it ended up Change the article
the whole
nearly
200.000 by 1990.
Change preposition
at nearly
Furthermore
, whilst the number
of men that have fulltime
showed Correct your spelling
full-time
steady
rise, the Add an article
a steady
number
of men that have part-time education
fluctuated. In 1970, there were
1.000.000 Change the verb form
was
male
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males
study
part-time, it decreased to nearly 830.000 in 1980 Replace the word
studying
then
it showed slight
increase to 900.000 by 1990.Add an article
a slight
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