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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied graphs illustrate the average ratio of three types of nutrients including sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 that
exciting
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are exciting
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 in the daily meals of American citizens and it can be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Overall
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, it can be seen that dinners and lunches have a great
amount
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 of
nutrients contents
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nutrient content
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while
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 breakfast has the lowest
amount
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. Apart from that,
sugar
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 is mainly high in snacks. In detail, the
amount
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 of sodium taken by Americans in their regular meals is found in dinners at 43% followed by lunchtimes that contain 29% of sodium. Both breakfasts and
snakes
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snacks
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 have the lowest percentages of 14%. In a similar fashion, the consumption of saturated fat eaten in dinner represents 37% with less
amount
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 consumed in lunch for about 26%. Snakes and breakfast are recorded
21
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% and 16% respectively. Regarding having
sugar
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 in typical meals, American people eat 42% of
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sugar
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the sugar
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 in their snacks.
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, 23% is had in the dinnertime.
Sugar
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 content in breakfast and snacks does not exceed 19%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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