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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
 who eat at fast
food
 restaurants in the USA in the years 2003, 2006, and 2013.
Overall
, the share of
people
 who eat fast
food
 once a
week
 and once or twice a month was higher than others.
furthermore
, the proportion of
people
 who never ate fast
food
 or ate every day was lower than others in all of the 3 years. First of all, the portion of
people
 who were eating fast
food
 every day or never eating was smaller than 5%,
while
 other
people
 who ate once a
week
 and once or two once a month was around 30% in 2003 and 2013, but in 2006 was lower by 10%.
furthermore
, the percentage of citizens who eat
food
 several times a
week
 and a few times a year was around 15% in the years 2003 and 2013,
although
 in 2006 was increased to 20%. As a whole, the small part of the chart belongs to the
people
 who were eating never or every day,
whereas
 the large segment of the chart includes the citizens who eat once a
week
 and once or twice a month.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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