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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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 who eat at fast
food
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 restaurants in the USA in the years 2003, 2006, and 2013.
Overall
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, the share of
people
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 who eat fast
food
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 once a
week
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 and once or twice a month was higher than others.
furthermore
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, the proportion of
people
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 who never ate fast
food
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 or ate every day was lower than others in all of the 3 years. First of all, the portion of
people
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 who were eating fast
food
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 every day or never eating was smaller than 5%,
while
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 other
people
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 who ate once a
week
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 and once or two once a month was around 30% in 2003 and 2013, but in 2006 was lower by 10%.
furthermore
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, the percentage of citizens who eat
food
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 several times a
week
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 and a few times a year was around 15% in the years 2003 and 2013,
although
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 in 2006 was increased to 20%. As a whole, the small part of the chart belongs to the
people
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 who were eating never or every day,
whereas
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 the large segment of the chart includes the citizens who eat once a
week
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 and once or twice a month.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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