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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching another planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology has taken over our lives and it provides
teremendous
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tremendous
opportunites
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opportunities
 for people and it might offer
livinig
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living
in
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on
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 another
planet
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, in future. It is argued that institutes have to spend large chunks of
money
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 to research to live
in
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on
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 another
planet
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.
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 trend is considered to be negative compared with negligible positive aspects.
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 essay will support our opinion with examples. On the one hand,
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 trend has some plus points. To start with, we may find a better
planet
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 with a more proper situation for living.
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, if we find
the
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planet
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 that
have
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 some suitable characteristics
such
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 as lush vegetation and enough clean water, all people desperately want to immigrate there.
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, there is no guarantee to find
this
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planet
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 even with spending a lot of
money
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.
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, it is somehow
plausibe
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plausible
 to explore to discover a novel
planet
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.
On the other hand
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, I believe that
this
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 research is detrimental.
Firstly
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, I think we have to preserve our
natrual
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natural
 habitat, apart from finding a new
planet
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 and if people see a novel
planet
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 that they can transfer to them, they
absoloutly
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absolutely
 will destroy the earth's habitat.
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, we can spend much more
money
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 to invest in fields related to
keep
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 the earth safe ,except spending to find
new
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a new
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planet
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.
As a result
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, it can be certainly said
this
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 trend is not
onlt
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only
 unnecessary but
also
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 detrimental. all things considered,
although
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 it has some plus points ,
such
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 as the chance of finding a decent
planet
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 and better quality of life,
this
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 is supported by many
fact
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that
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is
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are
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 detrimental like wasting large chunks of
money
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 and being unmotivated about protecting habitat.

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Task Achievement
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are clear and distinct, and they directly address the essay prompt. Your current introduction and conclusion are lacking direct relevance to the specific issue at hand regarding funding for space exploration.
Task Achievement
Work on developing your ideas more comprehensively. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, with fully elaborated and well-supported points rather than general statements.
Task Achievement
Aim to provide more specific examples that are directly relevant to your arguments. Vague or hypothetical examples lessen the impact of your reasoning and make your essay less persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay with a more logical structure. Use clear, logical paragraphing and make sure each paragraph centers around a single main idea for better coherence and cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Strive to maintain a logical flow throughout your essay. The progression from one idea to another should be smooth and easy to follow, with clear connections between points and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Address grammatical errors such as spelling ('teremendous' should be 'tremendous', 'natrual' should be 'natural') and syntax issues for improved coherence and overall readability.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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