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The table below illustrates the weekly consumption of milk and butter in different age groups in a European country.

The table below illustrates the weekly consumption of milk and butter in different age groups in a European country.
The table below illustrates the weekly consumption of
milk
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 and
butter
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 in different age groups in a European country.
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, those aged between 26- 45 had the least amount of both
full fat
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full-fat
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 foods but were the highest consumers of
low fat
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low-fat
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 products. The under 25’s consumed the majority of the
full fat
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milk
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 and
butter
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. Looking at the table in more detail, the category that had both types of
milk
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 the most was
the
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45-65, the figures respectively being 45 and 55. Generally,
low fat
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low-fat
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milk
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 was preferred by all the different ages apart from the under 25’s.
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 is indicated by the numbers for 26-45 year olds being double that of the under 25’s 80% to 41%. The next largest number was for the 65 plus for
low fat
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milk
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, with a numeric of 70%. In terms of
butter
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, there is less disparity between all the categories compared to
the
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milk
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. The figures for both types for the 45-65 are the exact same, 50% for 60 grams. Full fat 19g was eaten the least by the 26-45 with a statistic of only 38%.
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, 19g
low fat
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butter
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 was the highest figure of 62% by the 26-
45 year olds
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45-year-olds
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, butter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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