IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You and your neighbours have noticed that the rubbish collection services where you live have recently been quite bad. Write a letter to your local council. In your letter, – explain what you have recently experienced – explain what the neighbours have recently experienced – ask what action will be taken to improve the service

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Dear Sir or Madam,
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 is Isa Azim and I live on Bayview Avenue. I am writing
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 letter to complain about the rubbish collection services. Actually, it has been over than a couple of weeks since
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 urban service has been carried out in the worst conditions.
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, the services did not come at the exact time and
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, I miss them sometimes.
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, when we put the garbage outside the street cats scratch them and scatter the trash all over the street. My neighbours have the same experiences.
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, my front neighbour engaged with the person who was in charge of collecting the debris for not doing that at the appropriate time. They told me if these circumstances do not change promptly, they will sue the municipality and other responsible organisations. In my opinion, the number of contractors is inadequate.
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, I suggest you add extra contractors
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, more equipment for them to facilitate the rubbish collecting services. It would be appreciated if you take the necessary actions immediately. My contact number and email address are attached to the letter. Please do not hesitate to contact me at any time. I am waiting to hear from you. Yours sincerely Isa Azim

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that this is expanded upon logically with relevant supporting details. In your letter, some paragraphs could benefit from clearer focus on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
When structuring the letter, it is important to use a range of cohesive devices to help the letter 'flow' and to make your ideas easy to follow. Using linking words and phrases will enhance the logical structure of the letter.
task achievement
For the task achievement criterion, make sure to fully extend and support your points in relation to the task prompt. The letter addressed the key points but could offer more detailed experiences and examples.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout your letter as it is addressed to a local council. Your use of a suitable tone was good, but ensure consistency.
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