The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words in 20 minutes for this task.
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The assigned bar graph
elucidate
the information about the amount of free Correct subject-verb agreement
elucidates
time
enjoyed by male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
of
distinct employment positions and it was from the year Change preposition
in
of
1998 to 1999 Change preposition
apply
by
spending Change preposition
apply
time
in a week. It was have
five different streams Wrong verb form
has
like
Employed Change preposition
apply
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
, Employed part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
, Unemployed, Retired and Housewifes.
It is evident from bar
graph that Add an article
the bar
highest
hours of leisure Correct article usage
the highest
time
spend
Change the form of the verb
spent
from
Change preposition
by
unemployed
and Retired Correct article usage
the unemployed
by
men Change preposition
apply
it
was 82%. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Whereas
females
were enjoyed with family the hours of 78%. ,While
males second highest time
spend from employed full time
it was less than half and female has almost 38%.
Probing ahead, Males have not involved
in any activity Add a missing verb
been involved
employed
Correct word choice
and employed
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
and Housewifes as compared to females
only females
have leisure
Add an article
a leisure
time
with family in Housewifes and employed part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
it was (about 50% and 40% respectively).
Overview, females
have
more Verb problem
spend
time
an
hours in leisure activities Correct your spelling
and
rather
than males. But only two employment where men have enjoyed it Rephrase
apply
was
unemployed and Retired people.Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, females with synonyms.
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