The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words in 20 minutes for this task.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words in 20 minutes for this task.
The assigned bar graph
elucidate
Correct subject-verb agreement
elucidates
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the information about the amount of free
time
enjoyed by
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
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and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
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of
Change preposition
in
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distinct employment positions and it was from the year
of
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apply
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1998 to 1999
by
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apply
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spending
time
in a week. It
was have
Wrong verb form
has
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five different streams
like
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apply
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Employed
full
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full-time
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time
, Employed
part
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part-time
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time
, Unemployed, Retired and Housewifes. It is evident from
bar
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the bar
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graph that
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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hours of leisure
time
spend
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spent
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from
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by
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unemployed
Correct article usage
the unemployed
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and Retired
by
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apply
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men
it
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apply
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was 82%.
Whereas
females
were enjoyed with family the hours of 78%. ,
While
males second highest
time
spend from employed full
time
it was less than half and female has almost 38%. Probing ahead, Males have not
involved
Add a missing verb
been involved
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in any activity
employed
Correct word choice
and employed
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part
Add a hyphen
part-time
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time
and Housewifes as compared to
females
only
females
have
leisure
Add an article
a leisure
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time
with family in Housewifes and employed
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
show examples
time
it was (about 50% and 40% respectively). Overview,
females
have
Verb problem
spend
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more
time
an
Correct your spelling
and
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hours in leisure activities
rather
Rephrase
apply
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than males. But only two employment where men have enjoyed it
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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unemployed and Retired people.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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