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The pie chart illustrates the total proportion of three types of nutrients added in specific meals in The United States, which could be harmful to their body if they eat too much. Overall, most American meals contain high sodium and saturated fat in dinner compared to other nutrients except sugar, which is mostly added in snacks. To begin with, the highest amount of sodium and saturated fat in The US food is dinner, accounting for 43% and 37%, respectively. In contrast, only a little amount of those nutrients, with 21% saturated fat and 14% sodium, are founded in snack. This is because a considerable amout of sugar is dominated the total proportion, about 42%. On the other hand, the composition of sodium and saturated in lunch is slightly higher than breakfast by nearly 10 points. However, The proportion of added sugar in breakfast (16%) and lunch (19%) almost remain the same.

The pie chart illustrates the total proportion of three types of nutrients added in specific meals in The United States, which could be harmful to their body if they eat too much. Overall, most American meals contain high sodium and saturated fat in dinner compared to other nutrients except sugar, which is mostly added in snacks. To begin with, the highest amount of sodium and saturated fat in The US food is dinner, accounting for 43% and 37%, respectively. In contrast, only a little amount of those nutrients, with 21% saturated fat and 14% sodium, are founded in snack. This is because a considerable amout of sugar is dominated the total proportion, about 42%. On the other hand, the composition of sodium and saturated in lunch is slightly higher than breakfast by nearly 10 points. However, The proportion of added sugar in breakfast (16%) and lunch (19%) almost remain the same.
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The pie chart illustrates the total proportion of three types of nutrients added in specific meals in The United States, which could be harmful to their body if they eat too much.
Overall
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, most American meals contain high
sodium
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 and saturated fat in dinner compared to other nutrients except sugar, which is mostly added in snacks.
To begin
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 with, the highest amount of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in The US food is dinner, accounting for 43% and 37%, respectively.
In contrast
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, only a
little
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small
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 amount of those nutrients, with 21% saturated fat and 14%
sodium
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, are
founded
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found
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 in
snack
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snacks
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.
This
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 is because a considerable
amout
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amount
 of sugar is dominated the total proportion, about 42%.
On the other hand
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, the composition of
sodium
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 and saturated in lunch is slightly higher than
breakfast
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in breakfast
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 by nearly 10 points.
However
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, The proportion of added sugar in breakfast (16%) and lunch (19%) almost
remain
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remains
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 the same.
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