In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sports themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.
The
sport
programs on television have been a moment in recent Change the noun form
sports
a
decades. Even though the Correct article usage
apply
sport
programs had created more Change the noun form
sports
entertaint
by the producer, the teenagers won't Correct your spelling
entertained
entertainment
involving
any kind of sport Wrong verb form
be involved in
due
to looks like a spectator Change preposition
because
activity
. This
essay will discuss why many children has
Change the verb form
have
a
low motivation in a real Correct article usage
apply
activity
.
Although
a football program
provide
a real match, Change the verb form
provides
but
that Remove the conjunction
apply
program
has
designed to attract people. Verb problem
is
Such
as,
Remove the comma
apply
psy
war during a big match between a big club. Correct your spelling
a
That
is
not only Verb problem
involves
involving
the players but Verb problem
apply
also
Correct article usage
the supporter
supporter
or the coach. Occasionally, the psywar Fix the agreement mistake
supporters
more
important than a real match. Add a missing verb
is more
Thus
, many fans more
satisfied Add a missing verb
were more
enjoy
the psywar moment Fix the infinitive
to enjoy
among
that event and no more Change preposition
at
enjoy
the match. With that moment the company will earn Wrong verb form
enjoyed
many
Replace the quantifier
much
profit
from many Change to a plural noun
profits
entertaintments
.
Televised sports potentially reinforce the idea of sports as a spectator Correct your spelling
entertainments
entertainment
activity
, not a participatory one. The program
should provide spesific
Replace the word
a special
program
to show how a
journey of a young Correct article usage
the
stars
become a star in a club. Fix the agreement mistake
star
Such
as, Lionel Messi started a carrier
as a junior player in Barcelona until Correct your spelling
career
become
the Wrong verb form
became
gratest
Correct your spelling
greatest
off
all Change preposition
of
times
in football in recent decades. That Fix the agreement mistake
time
program
will encourage young people to love a
idol Change the article
an
then
love the Correct word choice
and then
activity
what
the idol didCorrect word choice
that
it
.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Conclusion
, many Change preposition
In conclusion
program
Change to a plural noun
programs
of
football Change preposition
apply
scedule
regularly on television but Correct your spelling
are
that
Correct determiner usage
those
program
only focus on console things. Fix the agreement mistake
programs
Personaly
, Correct your spelling
Personally
i
believe Change the capitalization
I
provide
a real Wrong verb form
providing
athelete
in Correct your spelling
athlete
Correct article usage
a particularly
particularly
field has a significant impact to Change the word
particular
rise
Add the particle
rise to
motivate
Wrong verb form
motivating
the
adolescent Correct article usage
apply
for
Change preposition
to
activie
in exercise.Correct your spelling
active
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear and logical structure, making it difficult to follow your argument. The introduction should be more engaging and clearly state the issue as well as your thesis statement. The main body should be organized into clear paragraphs, each with a single idea that is well-developed and supported by examples. The conclusion should succinctly summarize the points made in the essay and restate your opinion.
task achievement
You need to fully address both parts of the task, discussing why some believe television discourages youth sports participation and giving your own opinion. Devote at least one paragraph to explaining each view point before presenting your opinion. Use specific examples and details to support your arguments. Your response should be complete and engage with the prompt directly.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?