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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram outlines the process of the way in which
plastic
bottles
recyled
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recycled
.
Overall
, the diagram is cyclical and includes four main stages which are, collecting and sorting the material, crushing
into
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it into
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 small particles, producing raw material and
acquire
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acquiring
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 end products. In detail, the process starts with
collection
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the collection
a collection
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 of
plastic
bottles
 into
trash
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the trash
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 that has a
recyling
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recycling
 sign on it. The truck in charge,
then
,
take
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takes
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 the
trashes
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trash
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 and
transfer
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transfers
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 them into
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the recyling
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recyling
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recycling
 centre.
Next,
plactic
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plastic
bottles
 are sorted from unrelevant materials which is not convenient for recycling and compressed
them
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apply
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into huge blocks shaped as cubes. After that, the cubes
crushed
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are crushed
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 by automatic machines into smaller sizes through
washing
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the washing
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 area. Washed pieces,
subsequently
, undergo another machine which produces
plastic
 pellets from
plastic
 pieces and these
pelletes
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pellets
pelleted
then
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are then
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 heated to form raw material.
Finally
, acquired raw
material
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materials
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 are used
while
 producing varying end products
such
 as new
bottles
, t-shirts or pencils.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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