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some people believe leadership is a natural ability. Others think the leadership skills can be learned

#people #leadership #ability #skills
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There are several people who think that
leadership
 is a natural ability.
While
 there are others who think
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leadership
skills
 can be learned. In my opinion, both views can be true to some extent. In some cases, we can see some
childrean
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children
 who are
wiling
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 to lead their counterparts in different activities from an early age. They do it naturally and sometimes they do not know what they are doing exactly.These children, in fact, can benefit from their ability to lead others as they get older.
For instance
, they can be a diligent and
panctual
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punctual
 manager with strong
leadership
skills
 and
oustanding
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outstanding
 interpersonal
skills
 in the future. The important thing is that they have to be taught in terms of being in
a
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 right position in their future careers and they should know about their abilities to
persue
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pursue
a
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 right job.
On the other hand
,
they
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 are some individuals who have developed their
leadership
skills
 when they felt they
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 to do so.
For example
, when they get a raise in their job, one of their responsibilities will be delegating tasks to their coworkers. At
this
 point, they would realize improving their management abilities is crucial. There are several seminars and classes to participate, in order to
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 stronger
leadership
skills
. Nowadays, the widespread use of the Internet led to having easy access to these classes from all over the world. These classes and the techniques they suggest
,
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proof
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 that the
leadership
skills
, like many other
skills
, can be improved.
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