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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts illustrate how 4 countries generated
electricity
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 from 3 resources between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
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, these pies experienced a difference in ratio.
While
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 the majority
energy
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of energy
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 used in
India
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 and Vietnam were fossil fuels, the opposite could be seen in Morocco and
Sweden
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. Accounting for 82%, the production of fossil fuels
were
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dominate
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dominant
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 in
India
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 and minor in
Sweden
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, at 4%.
In contrast
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, reusable energy in
India
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 was less than one-fourth compared to
Sweden
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 made up
for
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apply
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four fifths
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four-fifths
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.
Electricity
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 generated by nuclear
inn
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in
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India
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 was the
least
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lowest
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 at 4% which was 90% less than
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Sweden
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in Sweden
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.
Similarly
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, hydraulic
power
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 contributed to 14% of
electricity
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 production in
India
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 and equivalented to 25% of
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 production, at 52%. It was noticeable that hydraulic
power
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 contributed to most of
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electricity
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the electricity
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 in
Sweden
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.
On the other hand
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, in Morocco, the proportion between
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and fossil fuels was considerable by 90%. Meanwhile, Vietnam saw a slight difference in ratio, by only 10%. Strikingly, Morocco and Vietnam did not use nuclear
power
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 to produce
electricity
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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