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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts illustrate how 4 countries generated
electricity
 from 3 resources between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
, these pies experienced a difference in ratio.
While
 the majority
energy
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 used in
India
 and Vietnam were fossil fuels, the opposite could be seen in Morocco and
Sweden
. Accounting for 82%, the production of fossil fuels
were
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dominate
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dominant
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 in
India
 and minor in
Sweden
, at 4%.
In contrast
, reusable energy in
India
 was less than one-fourth compared to
Sweden
 made up
for
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four fifths
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four-fifths
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.
Electricity
 generated by nuclear
inn
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in
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India
 was the
least
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lowest
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 at 4% which was 90% less than
Sweden
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in Sweden
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.
Similarly
, hydraulic
power
 contributed to 14% of
electricity
 production in
India
 and equivalented to 25% of
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 production, at 52%. It was noticeable that hydraulic
power
 contributed to most of
electricity
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the electricity
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 in
Sweden
.
On the other hand
, in Morocco, the proportion between
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 and fossil fuels was considerable by 90%. Meanwhile, Vietnam saw a slight difference in ratio, by only 10%. Strikingly, Morocco and Vietnam did not use nuclear
power
 to produce
electricity
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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