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The chart illustrates information on the percentage of British age group who donated for charity in 20 years from 1990 to 2010

The chart illustrates information on the percentage of British age group who donated for charity in 20 years from 1990 to 2010
The chart illustrates information on the percentage of British
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group
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 who donated for charity in 20 years from 1990 to 2010 Generally speaking , from the
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 bracket 18-25 to 36-50 , people contributed to charity have a decreasing trend compared between 1990 and 2010 , except for
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group
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 over 50 , which tended to increase slightly during the same period of time. The youngest
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 18-25 gave away the least to charity : 17% in 1990 and fell down 7% in 2010 .
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, the largest
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 36-50 endowed the most to organizations : 42 % ,
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 declined 35% at the same time .
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 , the
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group
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 of 26-35
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 reduced 31% in 1990 and 24% in 2010 ( 7% off ) .
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 , the rate of the elder made a donation of funding soared slightly . The people 51-65 years of
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 was 35% in 1990 , and rose 39% in 2010 ( increased by 4% ). The oldest
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 ( over 65) was 32% ,
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 reached to 35% for the same breath ( went up 3%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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