The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
The bar chart
illustrate
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the
percentage
of
coffee
and tea buying and drinking in five
region
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regions
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in Australia.
Overall
, in all regions, going to a café had the highest
percentage
except in
Adelaide
.
Also
, all countries had the same pattern in using
coffee
or tea except
Adelaide
. In terms of buying fresh
coffee
, Melbourne and Sydney had the biggest
percentage
, with about 64% and 61% respectively
while
Brisbane and
Adelaide
had the lowest
percentage
, with both nearly 35% which
it
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is about 4% less than Hobart. In terms of buying instant
coffee
, in Brisbane and Hobart, the
percentage
was over 50% and the
percentage
of the rest of
cities
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the cities
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was under 50%.
Also
, Sydney was the lowest, with 46%. In Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, over 60% of people went to a café
while
in Brisbane and
Adelaide
, the
percentage
was less, with 55% and 50% respectively.
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