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The two maps show the main changes of Islip town center currently and in the future.

The two maps show the main changes of Islip town center currently and in the future.
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In general, Islip
town
center
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centre
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 will become much more accessible by adding a shopping
center
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 to the bus station and a dual carriageway. By looking at the details from maps, the future development of the
town
 has more ways of transportation.The shape of the
town
 will convert to an oval shape.
Also
, the countryside will be cut down.
Moreover
, they will build more houses, and the single road will convert to a dual carriageway. A pedestrian will be built. Another change is that the part will be minor.
Also
, the bus station and car park are constructed near the shopping mall;
however
, the shopping mall will become smaller. In conclusion, by predicting future development, the
town
 will become more modern, and
also
, transportation will become more comfortable.
On the other hand
, many houses will be added, and the housing problem will be solved. The
town
 will have changed in great detail.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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