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Many elderly people are no long er looked after by their families but are put in care home or nursing home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

#people #families #care #home #trend
Nowadays many elderly
people
ere
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 no longer looked after by their families but are put in
care
home
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homes
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 or nursing
home
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homes
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.
This
 essay
willdescribe
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will describe
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
this
 trend. One of its pros is
24/7
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 check. In
such
 places
nurces
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nurses
 and doctors look after them
whole
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the whole
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 day and night, so if one elderly person feels sick or faints, there will be doctors, which can quickly help that individual. So from that
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 it's very safe for
such
people
be
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 there, because they know that they have
people
that
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who
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 will rescue them even when their
childs
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children
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 can't do it. But every good thing
have
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bad
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 side too, and
care
 homes have cons too.
For example
, the lack of loved ones around.
Although
 it is possible for friends and relatives to visit nursing
home
 residents, these visits can be infrequent, and loneliness is often the consequence. To make matters worse, it has been shown that those who are lonely are at greater risk of becoming depressed and having their immune system weakened.
Furthermore
,
care
home
 residents are often surrounded by illness and death.
Such
 an environment is likely to curtail happiness and trigger severe depression. In conclusion, I think even how great
care
home
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homes
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 and nursing homes
weren't
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are
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, elderly
people
 should live at
home
 near
to
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their children and friends.
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balanced response
Address both the advantages and the disadvantages equally and support them with clear, relevant examples. Explore each point more fully to satisfy the task requirement.
conclusion
While concluding, try to synthesize the information as opposed to restating it. Offer a thoughtful insight into the implications of the trend or a possible resolution.

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