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The graph shows the quantities of goods transported ini the uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport

The graph shows the quantities of goods transported ini the uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport
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The line chart
illutrates
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illustrates
 the
amount
 of products transported in the UK by 4 various types of transport from 1974 to 2002. It is measured
by
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in
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million
tonnes
.
Overall
, road
amount
 was the highest
million
tonnes
 among other categories,
while
 pipeline unit was less value in the following years.
Rail
quatities
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quantities
qualities
 and
water
 quantities fluctuated during the period. As can be seen from the line chart, road
amount
 started at nearly 70
million
tonnes
 in 1974, it saw a slight increase in 1990,
whereas
 it reached a peak ,
approximately
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 90
million
tonnes
 in 2002.
Pipeline
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The pipeline
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amount
 was 5
million
tonnes
 in 1974 and it rocketed
just
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 over 20 in 1982,
while
 it stood at
same
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the same
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 level until 1990,
then
 decreased slowly in 1994. From 1994 to 2002 the pipeline
amount
contain
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 20
million
tonnes
.
On the other hand
, looking at more details in the figure,
water
 and
rail
amount
 started at nearly 40
million
tonnes
 in 1974.
Water
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The water
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amount
 witnessed a rise, as
rail
experineced
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experienced
 a fall
dramaticly
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dramatically
.
Rail
amount
 fluctuated between 1986
abd
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and
 1994,
then
 it jumped
just
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to just
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 over 40
million
tonnes
 in 2002. During the period from 1982 to 194
water
 saw
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 significantly. In 1998,
water
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the water
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amount
 dropped slowly, after it rose in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, million, tonnes, rail, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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