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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantags.

#computers #education #disadvantags
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Computers
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 have brought numerous benefits to
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 life since their invention.
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computers
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 for education has increased in recent years.
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this
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 change has
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 to some advantages like
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 interactive education
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 and easy access to vast data, some drawbacks have existed like excessive screen
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 health concerns and concentration
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 among teenagers. It is undeniable that with the help of
computer
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 usage, teachers may create
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 interactive atmosphere
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 they teaching. Owing to various
computer
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-based programmes in
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, which may attract pupils, pupil’s
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participation
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first
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the first
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 class,
teacher
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the teacher
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 is trying
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to
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 explain a formula about math with
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, turning to the second one where
teacher
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the teacher
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 is utilizing a
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 and teaching the same formula with the help of images and figures.
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 both two teachers made
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 effort, students
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 the second class would be grasp the subject better than the first
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class’
 pupils.
Furthermore
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, children may access more and deeper information on
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the internet
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 than from a library.
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computers
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, searching any data takes only two seconds, in comparison with searching at
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 individuals may
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 their horizons faster.
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,
computers
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 have brought various pros in education including easy
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access
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faster
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and faster
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, and more effective learning
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process
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processes
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at
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 classes.
On the other hand
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, unfortunately,
computer
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 usage in
learning
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process
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 has resulted in some unexpected consequences.
Firstly
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, when students started to
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computers
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 with the aim of their homework, their
overall
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 of
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 some health issues have
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occurred
 like eye strain and poor posture among
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teenagers.
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, the
use
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 of technological
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 in
learning
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the learning
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process
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 has resulted in concentration
problems
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 among users.
Due to
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 the constant notifications,
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the user’s
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 focus
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disturbed
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serious
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these
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 are not treated by experts, these teenagers may suffer from concentration troubles in their
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, and inevitably their career and personal
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 may be affected badly. To wrap up, one should always keep in mind that,
computer
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use
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 may
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result in
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 on users.
To conclude
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, when all the things are taken into
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account,
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computer
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use
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 may create
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at
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 classes and make
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it easier
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 to
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access
 information, it may result in some serious
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 like eye strain, poor posture, and focus
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. In order to avoid
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the drawback
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drawback
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drawbacks
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, parents and tutors should make
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collaboration and limit the children’s
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 of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • online collaboration
  • multimedia resources
  • virtual classrooms
  • cybersecurity
  • pedagogy
  • remote learning
  • adaptive technology
  • educational inequality
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