some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are some arguments about the main environmental
issues
. While
some people say the loss
of particular species
are
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is
the
major Correct article usage
a
issues
, I tend to support the idea which says there are more important Fix the agreement mistake
issue
issues
in environment
.
On the Add an article
the environment
one
hand, it is true that the loss
in
some Change preposition
of
species
of plants and animals has appeared
a lot of Verb problem
caused
issues
and its effects are one
of the most controversial arguments throughout the world
. It has changed the cycle of nature and there are rise
and Fix the agreement mistake
rises
decline
in some particular Fix the agreement mistake
declines
species
which have a lot of problems in both man
life and Change noun form
man's
environment
.
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the environment
On the other hand
, although
this
loss
is one
of the main problems in environment
, there are Add an article
the environment
another
vital Replace the adjective
other
issues
which are destroying the
nature, Correct article usage
apply
such
as the pollution of transportation and factories, global warming, loss
in oceans' water and the poisonous gases footprint. Firstly
, global warming is one
of the causes which melt ices
and destroy waters around the Fix the agreement mistake
ice
world
and most of
countries are faced Change preposition
apply
to
drought. Change preposition
with
Secondly
, the Governments are faced to
pollution Change preposition
with
especially
in capital cities. Add the comma(s)
, especially
For instance
, the capital of Iran, Tehran, is one
of the most polluted city
in the Change to a plural noun
cities
world
and that
effects of its pollution influence Correct determiner usage
the
individuals
lives Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
such
as sickness. Nevertheless
, the governments are trying to take some measures to control these issues
.
By the
way Correct article usage
apply
of
conclusion, whilst the Change preposition
in
loss
in
both Change preposition
of
plants
and Fix the agreement mistake
plant
animals
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animal
species
is one
of the issues
that we are faced to
in the modern Change preposition
with
world
, I firmly agree with this
nation which says nowadays there are a lot of more important issues
in nature.Submitted by amirrezadelghandi3 on
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