The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the percentages of the total money spent on three service types in a certain country in Europe
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while
distributing the age groups consuming these services.
Overall
, people under the age of 30 dedicate most of their salaries to restaurants and hotels, but others pay most of their income for food and drinks.
It is clear that
food and drinks are mostly bought by older people particularly those aged 76
years
and older. The amount of money put into entertainment facilities varies among the groups,
while
the community between ( 61 to 75)
years
prioritize it with approximately 23% of their
overall
spending, it is notable that societies which are younger than 30
years
old do not pay much attention to
such
entertaining activities, so they give about 6% only from their budget on it. When it comes to paying for restaurants and hotels, records show that each person between 61 and 75
years
old spends less than 5% of their money on
such
destinations.
In contrast
, these
places'finances
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finances
depend on more than 10% of budgets from both groups ( 31 to 45) and ( 46 to 60).
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