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Grandparents take care of children when their parents are out at work. What are the advantages and possible disadvantages of this?

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These days people are busy with their occupations and they don'
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 to spend with their
children
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, grandfathers retire and look after
grandchildren
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, if they are looking for
grandchildren
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 they don'
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 have to
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 themself. It has more pros and
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grandparents
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' Baby City can help save money compared to a nanny or other companies.
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 providing the opportunity for
children
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 their conversations with
children
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 as beautiful stories and their own experiences. For the more, they both
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 and feed each other. Because of their bother same
children
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. And they
fulfill
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 their
grandchildren
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 emotionally rich. They provide
children
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 with
behavior
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 development.
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children
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 can take extra knowledge from their
grandparents
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 that the most fulfilling job they are. It is hard to feel like you don'
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you heavily and they are making a difference in their lifestyle in their retired times.
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Love
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 to stay relaxed and
love
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 to enjoy going out to dinner or coffee with their friends.
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 to travel overseas. They have to spend a lot of
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 with their
grandchildren
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 and they don'
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 have to
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 themselves. In conclusion, the main point is more
prons
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 and
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 both.
grandparents
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 look after their
grandchildren
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 it is more and more better their safety.
Children
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 who grow up with their
grandparents
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 have extra knowledge of living lovely with
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 are looking for
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 have to spend
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 with themselves. There are more
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Ensure your essay remains on topic; it seems you stray from the key points at times. Provide a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages as per the prompt.
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Use specific examples to support your points. These examples should be relevant and help illustrate your argument.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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