The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts compare the Proportion of consumption
water
in six different areas, North and
south
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America, Europe, Africa, and Central and South
east
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Asia
on the basis of Agricultural, Domestic, and Industrial use.
Overall
, the amount of
water
which is used for the purpose of farming and food production is the greatest deal in all areas except North America Which it’s the most amount of utilized
water
is
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for the purpose of industrial. The usage of
water
domestically has the lowest rate. In Central
Asia
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Asia,
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the utilization of
water
is much more than
other
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regions at about 9 out of 10 and European consumes the lowest amount of
water
in
agricultural
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at about a third.
While
in Europe the highest sum of
water
approximately half percent
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in industrial areas and in central
Asia
a negligible quantity of
water
is utilized in factories. South East
Asia
and Central
Asia
consumed
water
domestically is equal at 7% and
this
rate in South America is more than others at around a fifth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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