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The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.

The bar chart shows the number of children in two different age groups in an average class in different countries.
#bar #children #two #age #groups #class #countries
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The bar chart illustrates the counts of students in two different age
group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups
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 in an average class
at
Change preposition
in
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specific countries are; Japan, Hong, Russia,
United
Correct article usage
the United
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Correct your spelling
States
Stautes
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States
 and Gol** Specific countries
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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explay
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explain
 the numbers of
student
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students
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 in various age groups in an average class.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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