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The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011
The line graph provides information about the average
attendance
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 at cinema among various
age
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 groups in the United America from 2000 to 2011.
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, the trend of average
attendance
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 increased from 2000 to 2010. The
age
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group
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 15-24 experienced a significant
increase
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, meanwhile, the
age
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group
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 of 35 and over showed the least
increase
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. The average
attendance
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 for the 15-24
age
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 category increased gradually from 15% to 32% between 2000 and 2004,
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 fluctuated from 2006 (45%) to 2011 (52%). And reached a peak of 58% between 2010 and 2011. Meanwhile, in the 7-14
age
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 category, the average
attendance
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 fluctuated from 2000 (10%) to 2005 (15%), and rose rapidly from 15% in 2005 to 30% in 2008.
This
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group
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 reached the same value of 15% as the
age
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 of 25-35. The 25-35
age
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 category experienced a gradual
increase
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 from 5% in 2000 to almost 30% in 2008, reaching its peak at 38% in 2010. In more detail, the
age
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group
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 35 and over showed a stable
increase
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 during the given period from 2% in 2000 to 15% in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words attendance, age, group, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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