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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the monthly
change
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 trend of the prices of
Copper
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,
Nickel
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, and
Zinc
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 during 2014 on average.
Overall
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, all three metals have a fluctuating
price
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 on average during 2014. The lowest trend of average
price
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 is
Nickel
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, and the stable side is
Copper
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. During 2014
Nickel
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 is a metal stuff that has an unstable average
price
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 and has the lowest trend compare with
Copper
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 and
Zinc
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.
Nickel
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’s
price
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 on average starts at 6% and in 3 months straightly down to 1%. The
price
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 was stable until May, but it was down to the lowest level at -3%. In the next month, the condition was better.
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, the
price
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 level is still the lowest
at the
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end
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 at 1%.
On the other hand
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,
Zinc
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 has fluctuated. The
change
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 of
price
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 is rise from 1% to 3% in the first.
However
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, the situation was slightly down until June. The condition goes to a stable position in 3 months at 1% from July to September, but in the next month the
price
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 fluctuates and peaks at the first position
at the
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end
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 at 2%.
Copper
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 has a better
change
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 in
price
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 compared with
Nickel
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 and
Zinc
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.
Copper
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’s
change
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price
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 is more stable than others.
Copper
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 had started at 2% and slightly down to under 0% in June. The condition was up to 1% and stayed for 3 months until September. The
price
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 was down to under 1%, but in the
end
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 was up to 1,5%. The percentage of
change
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 in
price
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 for 3 metals has fluctuated but the
price
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 was stable
in
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from
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 July until September. In the
end
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,
Zinc
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 was raised in the first position at 2%,
Copper
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 was second at 1,5%, and
Nickel
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 was third at 1%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, price, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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