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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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The given map illustrates
two
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 possible locations in Paris where a company have a plan to make a
restaurant
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.
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, it can be seen that
location
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 one is predicted to be in the top left corner of the map
while
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 the second
location
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 will be located beside the Eiffel Tower which is hosted by more tourists. Looking at more detail, the first
location
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 will be on the northwest side of the map just to the left of the park. The Maritime Museum above
this
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location
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 will be visited by 8000 visitors each day. They are likely to visit
this
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restaurant
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 as well to have meals. The distance to access various public centres will be possible via
two
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 brides in
two
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 different parts of the area. In order to the second
location
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 of a new
restaurant
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, its view will be far more eye-catching than the first one. The river seine to the south of
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restaurant
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as well as
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 The Eiffel Tower on the left side make
this
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location
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 unique.
In addition
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,
sports
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the sports
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centre
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centres
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, public
park
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parks
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 and art
gallery
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galleries
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 around
this
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location
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 will attract more customers.
Also
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,
this
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 mentioned tower is visited by 16000 tourists each day which is a significant factor in fostering the profit via them in
location
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two
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, restaurant, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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