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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the
overall
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 amount of produced
milk
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 in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010, particularly in four countries; the
Nethrlands
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Netherlands
, Australia,
Tanazania
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Tanzania
 and Guatemala.
Overall
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, during the three decades, the Netherlands ranked as the highest nation in producing milky products,
while
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 Guatemala recorded the lowest
proprotions
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proportion
proportions
 of these products.
It is clear that
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 the
Nethrelands'
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Netherlands'
rated
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rate
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 remained steady with more than 11 million
litres
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 of
milk
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 annually in the three years. The second most dairy-producing nation was Australia, by milking more than 11 million
litres
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 in both years; 1990 and 2000,
however
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, a
sligh
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slight
 decrease
occured
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occurred
 in the net dairy outcomes in 2010 producing 9,165,00
litres
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 of
milk
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. When it comes to Tanzania's figures, it
significanlty
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significantly
 grew from 87
thousands
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thousand
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 liters in 1990 to more than one million
litres
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 in 2000,
then
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 the country achieved a peak of 1,55,000 in 2010. Guatemala's experience in
milk
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 production
doubles
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doubled
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 its
growuth
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growth
 between 1990 and 2000, as it rose from 26,000
litres
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 to 55,000,
then
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 the production levels
also
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 increased reaching
to
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84,000
litres
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 in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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