You have been asked to organise a social event for your company. Write an email to your colleagues. In the email say: - What suggestions have been made - What you think about the suggestions - What you have decided to do

Dear colleagues, We haven’t been able to have an end-of-year social event for the past two years
due to
limited funds.
This
year,
however
, the company has offered to pay for an end-of-year party. We’ve discussed various options as you will see below.
Firstly
we considered an office party held on the premises. The main advantage of
this
would be that it avoids any need for people to make special travel arrangements.
On the other hand
, the building doesn’t really have a space
that is
suitable. We
therefore
looked at a meal out as there are a number of suitable restaurants close to the office. One argument against
this
was that sitting at
table
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the table
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is not a good way for us to mix and get to know people from other departments.
Finally
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Finally,
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we discussed a day trip,
for example
to a local tourist spot. The main drawback of
this
is the cost.
In addition
, it’s difficult to find somewhere that caters for all of our needs and interests. Taking all of the points into consideration, we propose an office party for all staff, to be held in the main reception area. Date and time to be confirmed. Please let us know your opinion, preferably before the end of next week. Thank you, Fiona
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Task Achievement
Your response effectively outlines possible suggestions for the social event, but could demonstrate comprehensive development of these ideas by expanding on the implications or effects of these options. Provide more relevant, specific examples or details to support your opinions and decisions.

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