The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides information
of
estimated world uneducated people rates by district and by sex for the Change preposition
on
last
year.
Linking Words
Overall
,Linking Words
illiteracy
rate of citizens from Correct article usage
the illiteracy
south asia
is the highest in both genders,Correct your spelling
South Asia
while
in developed countries only a few Linking Words
men
and women Use synonyms
are not
get Verb problem
do
education
.
Add an article
an education
To begin
with,Linking Words
men
and women,unable to read and write,was made up around 1% and 2% in developed countries.In Use synonyms
comparision
,the proportion of illiterate Correct your spelling
comparison
cityzens
in Latin Correct your spelling
cities
Ameria
and the Caribbean Correct your spelling
America
were
higher,above 10 and around 12 respectively for Correct subject-verb agreement
was
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
.In east Fix the agreement mistake
females
asia
and the Change the capitalization
Asia
oceania
,Change the capitalization
Oceania
however
,the gap between Linking Words
men
and female was enormous,there Use synonyms
were
Change the verb form
was
exact
20% compared Change the word
exactly
wit
almost 8% Correct your spelling
with
Use synonyms
men
.
With regard to other nations,Sub-Saharan Change preposition
of men
africa
had much Change the capitalization
Africa
greather
proportions of the unschooled population,approximately 48% women and above 30% Correct your spelling
greater
men
.In terms of Arab states,more than half of the Use synonyms
femal
was illiterate and almost Correct your spelling
female
one-quarth
of Correct your spelling
one-quarter
one-quart
men
.Use synonyms
Lastly
,South Linking Words
asia
stood out as having the Change the capitalization
Asia
the
worst illiteracy figures for both sexes,55%female versus Remove the redundancy
apply
aroung
35%Correct your spelling
around
men
.Use synonyms
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