The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provides information
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estimated world uneducated people rates by district and by sex for the
last
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year.
Overall
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,
illiteracy
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the illiteracy
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rate of citizens from
south asia
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South Asia
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is the highest in both genders,
while
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in developed countries only a few
men
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and women
are not
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get
education
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an education
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.
To begin
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with,
men
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and women,unable to read and write,was made up around 1% and 2% in developed countries.In
comparision
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comparison
,the proportion of illiterate
cityzens
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cities
in Latin
Ameria
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America
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and the Caribbean
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higher,above 10 and around 12 respectively for
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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.In east
asia
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Asia
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and the
oceania
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Oceania
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,
however
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,the gap between
men
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and female was enormous,there
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exact
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20% compared
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with
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almost 8%
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men
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of men
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. With regard to other nations,Sub-Saharan
africa
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Africa
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had much
greather
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greater
proportions of the unschooled population,approximately 48% women and above 30%
men
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.In terms of Arab states,more than half of the
femal
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female
was illiterate and almost
one-quarth
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one-quarter
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of
men
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.
Lastly
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,South
asia
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Asia
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stood out as having the
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worst illiteracy figures for both sexes,55%female versus
aroung
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around
35%
men
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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