The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart provides information
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estimated world uneducated people rates by district and by sex for the
last
year.
Overall
,
illiteracy
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the illiteracy
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rate of citizens from
south asia
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South Asia
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is the highest in both genders,
while
in developed countries only a few
men
and women
are not
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get
education
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an education
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.
To begin
with,
men
and women,unable to read and write,was made up around 1% and 2% in developed countries.In
comparision
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comparison
,the proportion of illiterate
cityzens
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cities
in Latin
Ameria
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America
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and the Caribbean
were
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was
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higher,above 10 and around 12 respectively for
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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.In east
asia
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and the
oceania
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Oceania
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,
however
,the gap between
men
and female was enormous,there
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exact
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20% compared
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with
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almost 8%
men
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of men
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. With regard to other nations,Sub-Saharan
africa
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Africa
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had much
greather
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greater
proportions of the unschooled population,approximately 48% women and above 30%
men
.In terms of Arab states,more than half of the
femal
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female
was illiterate and almost
one-quarth
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one-quarter
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of
men
.
Lastly
,South
asia
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Asia
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stood out as having the
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worst illiteracy figures for both sexes,55%female versus
aroung
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around
35%
men
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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