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The bar chart illustrates how the price of a cup of coffee changed in six different cities between 2010 and 2014 in Australia

The bar chart illustrates how the price of a cup of coffee changed in six different cities between 2010 and 2014 in Australia
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The table
illustrate
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that
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of
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the amount of a cup of coffee in some cities in Australia between years. We can see that we have some statistics about prices and
value
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values
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 that have changed.
firstly
, we have a simulation in 3
town
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towns
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 with
middle
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a middle
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price
. Brisbane, Canberra and Adelaide
which their
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price
 fluctuated between about 3.30 to 3.35 Australian dollars in 2010. After 4 years, their
price
 dumped at 3.60 , 3.50 and 3.45
Respectively
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respectively
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.
Although
 Canberra is
same
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the same
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 as Adelaide in change percentage, Brisbane surged a cup of coffee
price
about
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 3
percent
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per cent
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.
Secondly
, we see that Melbourne and Sydney
have
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had
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 the lowest
price
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prices
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 in 2010.
In addition
, in 2014 they rocketed their
price
about
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by about
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 9
percent
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per cent
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average
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on average
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in
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apply
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2014.
By contrast
, Perth
city
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have
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 the most expensive drinks. They sold their cup of coffee at 3.70 dollars in 2010,
while
 they increased their
price
at
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to
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 3.95 in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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