In many cities an increaing number of people do not knowtheir neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

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living is part of human civilisation. In several cities around the

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balance.

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government should initiate more

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which might attract

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task achievement

The essay provides a reasonable attempt at outlining the causes and solutions to the lack of community in cities. However, the ideas are sometimes underdeveloped and there's a lack of specific examples to enhance the arguments. Ensure that each body paragraph is developed with a clear main idea, followed by specific examples or explanation to support it.

coherence cohesion

There is a clear attempt to structure the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The logical progression of ideas is somewhat evident, but the cohesion could be improved. Considering the use of cohesive devices to logically connect ideas within and between paragraphs. Also, proofread for run-on sentences, and try to vary sentence structure to enhance readability.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Rapid urbanization
Densely populated
Personal connections
Digital communication
Face-to-face conversations
Fast-paced lifestyle
Community engagement
Transient nature
Urban designs
Community gardens
Recreational facilities
Community events
Neighborhood associations
Social gatherings
Local networking
Civic activities
Sense of community
Fostering
Mutual understanding
Sense of belonging
Sense of responsibility

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In many cities an increaing number of people do not knowtheir neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

Your opinion

Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than show the cultures or artworks of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some experts believe that is the better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people depend on their smartphones and other electronic devices for communication, work, and entertainment. To what extent do you think that this reliance on technology is affecting interpersonal relationships and face-to-face communication?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?