The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.

The chart illustrates the total minutes that the British use telephone call between 1995 to 2002 in three types including Local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles.
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The following chart illustrates the statistics of how the locals in the UK accessed various call types between the years 1995 and 2002. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that there are three different figures that were differentiated by the duration of the calls. Looking closely at the data, it shows that the usage of mobile that represented all calls has significantly risen and reached its peak with 45 billion minute calls.
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the local line produces the highest shares where it does not show the shares below 70 even though it does not significantly increase and has its peak years in 1998 and 1999 with exactly 90 billion minutes.
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, the national and overseas services succeeded in maintaining their shares to keep growing throughout the years, though the average is considerably lower than the local calls with 60 billion minutes as the maximum duration. To draw the conclusion, UK citizens do not consistently call through local lines because they keep on calling through domestic and overseas services which makes the mobiles keep growing as well.
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