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You are planning a week long vacation, and you need someone to take care of your house while you are away. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter, - tell your neighbour that you are going away - ask your neighbour to take care of your house for you - explain what tasks you would like your neighbour to do.

#week #vacation #someone #care #house #neighbour #tasks
Dear, Jessica
Due to
summer
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the summer
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 holiday, I am planning to go to Denmark
tommorow
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tomorrow
 with my family. We will take
a
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some
vacantion
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vacation
 for 2 weeks.
While
us
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there our
resident
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 will be empty for long days. I leave our dogs in the
house
, because we impossible to bring them with us.
On
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this
letter
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letter,
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 I am asking you to help us to take care
our
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of our
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house
while
 us in Denmark. Because you are is one of a kind neighbour that I have, I hope you willing to help me as you can. I will explain the things that you would to do
while
 I am not in the
house
.
Firstly
, our dogs usually take a morning walk every 6 a.m to pie or
doing
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 something outside the
house
. I you are able please take them
to
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on
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morning
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a morning
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 walk. You can bring them some snacks and their food that I put on the refrigerator. Please take the post on
thursday
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Thursday
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 morning and put it down on the table in front of the window. The key of
backdoor
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the backdoor
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 I put below the doormat. I hope you be able to help us to take care
our
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of our
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house
while
 we
not
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are not
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 in here. Yours sincerely, Pinkan
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Separate different ideas and tasks into individual paragraphs to improve clarity.
task achievement
Address the tasks specified by the prompt with more detail to fully accomplish the task response.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent formal or informal writing tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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