Some people say that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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task achievement
The essay provided is significantly underlength and does not fulfil the requirements of the IELTS writing task 2. A complete essay should include an introduction, at least two main body paragraphs discussing both views, and a conclusion that restates your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The text lacks clear and logical progression of ideas. Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs that address the prompt, and a conclusion that summarizes the essay and restates your opinion. Use cohesive devices to connect ideas and paragraphs.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite