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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph provided,
give
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gives
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 information about the average monthly percentage change
price
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 of metals
such
Linking Words
 as
copper
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,
nickel
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 and zinc throughout 2014.
By
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On
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 average,
nickel
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price
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prices
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 continue to decline from January to
June
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 2014. The steepest drop
of
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in
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nickel
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price
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 happened in the month of May from 0,5% to -3% on
June
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 2014. Afterwards,
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nickel
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the nickel
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price
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rise
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rose
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 in July 2014 and
continue
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continued
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 to show
its
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apply
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stable growth until
September
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 2014.
Nickel
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price
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surge
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surged
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 from October to November. As for,
copper
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price
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 gradually falls from January to May.
Copper
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price
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rise
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rose
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 from
June
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 to July,
afterwards
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but afterwards
show examples
price
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 of
copper
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 doesn't show any change until
September
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 2014. Zinc
price
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 is the only metal
price
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 that shows a hike from January to February, but after that zinc
price
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move
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moves
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in
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at
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 a decelerate pace from February to
June
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. It only shows
little
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a little
the little
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rise
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 in July and
continue
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continues
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 to move
in
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at
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 a stable pace until
September
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. We can conclude that the movement of prices from
June
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 until
September
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 significantly
move
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moved
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in
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at
show examples
a
Correct article usage
the
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 same pace,
whereas
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 the
price
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 first
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rise
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rose
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 in
June
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 to July and
doesn't
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didn't
show examples
 show any change until
September
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 2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, june, rise, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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