The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.
The graph provided,
give
Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
show examples
information about the average monthly percentage change
price
of metals
such
as
copper
,
nickel
and zinc throughout 2014.
By
Change preposition
On
show examples
average,
nickel
price
Fix the agreement mistake
prices
show examples
continue to decline from January to
June
2014. The steepest drop
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
nickel
price
happened in the month of May from 0,5% to -3% on
June
2014. Afterwards,
nickel
Correct article usage
the nickel
show examples
price
rise
Replace the word
rose
show examples
in July 2014 and
continue
Wrong verb form
continued
show examples
to show
its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
stable growth until
September
2014.
Nickel
price
surge
Wrong verb form
surged
show examples
from October to November. As for,
copper
price
gradually falls from January to May.
Copper
price
rise
Replace the word
rose
show examples
from
June
to July,
afterwards
Correct word choice
but afterwards
show examples
price
of
copper
doesn't show any change until
September
2014. Zinc
price
is the only metal
price
that shows a hike from January to February, but after that zinc
price
move
Correct subject-verb agreement
moves
show examples
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
a decelerate pace from February to
June
. It only shows
little
Add an article
a little
the little
show examples
rise
in July and
continue
Correct subject-verb agreement
continues
show examples
to move
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
a stable pace until
September
. We can conclude that the movement of prices from
June
until
September
significantly
move
Wrong verb form
moved
show examples
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
same pace,
whereas
the
price
first
rise
Replace the word
rose
show examples
in
June
to July and
doesn't
Wrong verb form
didn't
show examples
show any change until
September
2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, nickel, june, rise, september with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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