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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people say there is no need for print newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 believe that printing
newspapers
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 is no longer required
while
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 others claim to find
newspapers
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helpfull
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helpful
helpfully
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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newspapers
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 must be printed as they have many benefits.
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, reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 early in the morning develops a discipline in individuals.
People
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 tend to apply
this
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 behaviour in various day-to-day activities, which helps in their personal growth.
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, children can benefit from reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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everyday
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every day
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 as it can help improve their vocabulary, speaking and writing skills.
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 will
in-turn
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in turn
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 help children in their academic growth. In
todays
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today's
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 generation, digital news is taking over
newspapers
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.
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which
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this
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, we can see
serious
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the serious
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 impact
in
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 journalism as a career.
Eventhough
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Even though
 accessibility and
convinience
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convenience
is
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are
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 better in digital media, it lacks in-depth analysis.
Apart from
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this
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, there is
also
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 a fear of fake news in digital media.
Where as
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,
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apply
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 every article in a newspaper is
fact checked
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fact-checked
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 before it is printed.
This
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 makes it more reliable as compared to digital news. Some
people
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 may raise concerns over the environmental impact
on
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of
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 paper usage. I believe, that
this
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 problem can be solved in many ways. One
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, guiding publications to strictly use biodegradable, reusable and
good quality
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 papers.
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,
newspapers
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 can be a great source to keep
people
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 informed about happenings within and outside the country.
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coherence cohesion
For a higher score in coherence and cohesion, work on using a range of cohesive devices effectively. This includes not just conjunctions and transition words, but also pronouns and synonyms that ensure smooth reading and clear connections between your points.
task achievement
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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital revolution
  • sustainability
  • instantaneous
  • editorial integrity
  • demographic disparities
  • gatekeeping in journalism
  • nostalgic value
  • economic viability
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