The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map reveals
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possible
sites
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for a new supermarket (s) which is planned for the town, Garlsdon.
Overall
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, the
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sites
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were far from each other since one was in the centre of the town and the other was in the countryside.
According to
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the information shown on the map, it can be apparently seen that both
sites
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were near the railway.
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, industrial areas are closer to the
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sites
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than housing areas.
Moreover
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, S1 was 12 km away from Hindon where the population was 10,000 .
On the other hand
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, S2 was 16km to Brangdon which had 15,000 citizens and 25 km to Crandon which had 29,000 citizens. What should be particularly mentioned is that the town centre was a no traffic zone and the population of Garlsdon was 65000 which was above 6 times that of Hindon.
To sum up
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, the
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sites
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will bring benefits to different regions of people.
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  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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