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An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good?

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Nowadays,
people
 have a new way
in
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 finding their life partner by using dating apps. I believe that
this
 trend will
give
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 a lot of benefits for
people
, especially
in
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during
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 the COVID-19 outbreak. Since the COVID-19 pandemic occurred, technology has helped
people
 in many ways in life, including dating. Since
people
's mobility
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were
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 limited during the outbreak,
the
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dating
app
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apps
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 helped individuals
to
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meet new
people
 without even
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needing
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need
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needing
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 to go out
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from
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 their
house
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homes
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. Far more, by using dating apps,
people
 can have the opportunity to meet new
acquaintance
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 from far origins.
This
 definitely will help many in getting their loved
one
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ones
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 in
that
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those
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 hard
circumtances
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circumstances
.
On the other hand
, dating sites are time effective
to meet
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for meeting
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 someone with our preferences since they provide complete profiles and personalities from their user.
Thus
,
people
 on the site can easily choose those that only match their preferences. Once they find their match, each individual has a chance to
gain
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a
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talk through the chat feature provided and freely decide
to
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whether to
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 continue their relationship or not. The chat feature can be a filter machine to prevent
people
meeting
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from meeting
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 bad
counterpart
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counterparts
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 in person.
For instance
, if from the chit-chat they had, they already smell something suspicious,
such
 us, perhaps, their profiles can not be detected on other social media
and
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etc.,
then
 they can just stop the conversation and end the relationship as it is. But,
this
also
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user
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the user
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 to share their private information wisely. In summary, dating apps have
its
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 advantages outweigh the drawbacks since
it
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they
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gives
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give
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to meet new
people
 without even
need
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needing
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 to meet them in person and it is time effective for screening our ideal type of boyfriend/girlfriend.
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In terms of coherence and cohesion, the essay presents a generally logical sequence of ideas with a clear introduction and conclusion. Nonetheless, the transition between ideas could be improved. Ensure smooth flow by linking sentences and paragraphs effectively with a variety of cohesive devices.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt, but delves more into the advantages of dating apps, not fully exploring how it might do harm. To fully respond to the task, contrast both views presented in the prompt and offer a balanced discussion before concluding with your opinion.

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