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You are planning a holiday in another country and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to the friend asking him/her to join you. In your letter, explain: • why you are taking a holiday • what your holiday plan is • why you would like him/her to go with you

#holiday #country #friend #plan
Dear Rohit, I hope you are doing
good
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, I am very excited to tell you that I am
planing
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planning
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 to come to visit Canada to spend
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an annaul
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annaul
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annual
vacations
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vacation
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 and would request you to accompany me. I am making
this
 plan as I have
may
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many
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 leaves which I need to
awail
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avail
wait
wail
 as per my office policies else these leaves will
lapes
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leave
. Pertaining to
holiday
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the holiday
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 plan
firstly
 I am going to visit
the
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apply
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New
york city
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York City
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 after that I will reach
to
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Toronto in Canada and will
puchase
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purchase
 some stuff and I will explore the famous Palces. I want that You
shlud
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should
 be part of my trip as you are fully aware
about
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 the maximum tourist places and
also
 aware
abot
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of
 the Indian food from where we can get good food and
accomodation
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accommodation
 facilities. I would be very much happy if you
will
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would
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 become a part of
this
 trip. I am looking forward
your
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to your
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 positive reply, Thanks in advance !
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you open with a clear greeting and close with an appropriate sign-off. Use paragraphs effectively, with one idea per paragraph.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and formal tone suitable for a friendly correspondence. Avoid informal language and contractions.
task achievement
Check that you fully address each point of the task with relevant details. Your letter should explain your reasons for the holiday, delineate your plans clearly, and express why you'd like your friend to join in an engaging and complete manner.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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