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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process by which brick manufacturing
bricks
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 are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps.
First
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 the raw material,
clay
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, which lies just below the surface of soil in certain
clay
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-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.
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 the lumps of
clay
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 are placed on a metal grid, in order to break up the big chunks of
clay
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 into much smaller ones, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion
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 segregates the bits of
clay
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. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is
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 either formed in moulds or cut into
brick shaped
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brick-shaped
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 pieces by
mean
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 of a wire cutter. These fresh
bricks
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 are
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 kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of
bricks
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 at a time. The dried
bricks
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 are
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tranferred
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transferred
 to a so-called kiln, another type of
high temperature
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high-temperature
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even
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event
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.
First
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 they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200-980°C,
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 at a high temperature of 870-1300°C.
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 process is followed by cooling down the finished
bricks
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 for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber. Once the
bricks
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 have cooled down and
have
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become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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