Poverty is a problem that affects the majority of children these days. Discuss the effects of poverty on society and suggest some solutions to this problem.

Poverty
is an issue that
have
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affected the vast majority of
kids
these days. Some effects of
poverty
are
disnutririon
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innutrition
and low level of
education
, and some possible solutions for these are more
job
opportunities from companies and offering high
job
salaries. One of the effects of
poverty
is disnutrition because parents do not have enough
money
to buy food.
Firstly
, they need to pay rent and utility bills and
then
think about buying groceries for their
kids
.
This
leads to
have
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less food to eat and
kids
suffer from eating less vitamins and eventually feeling sick. Another effect of
poverty
on
children
is having
low
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a low
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level of
education
due
of
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to
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not having enough
money
to pay
books
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for books
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and
tuitions
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. Many
children
decide not to pay attention
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in
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class because their parents have no
money
, so they do poorly at school.
For instance
, in Latin
America
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most
kids
do not reach high-school
education
because there is no
money
to pay
school
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and buy books. If
this
does not change, more
children
will decide not to continue attending elementary school because they know they have no chances at all. One possible solution for these issues is offering
job
opportunities for individuals without asking for too many
requierements
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requirements
, so people will feel
a
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desire to continue working and will have the opportunity to protect their
kids
. Having more jobs might motivate adults to attend work every day and they will have more
money
to provide anything their
children
need.
Also
, companies need to offer high-
job
salaries that can help parents to pay rent, utility bills, food and have extra
money
to have a
saving
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savings
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account. If these
happend
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happen
happened
, society might feel interested to keep going with their jobs every day. To illustrate my point, many people all over the world decide to live in a foreign country to look for a high-paying salary because they can not handle their
children
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sustent, and
this
is pretty sad.
To conclude
,
poverty
is a huge factor that
affect
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children
all over the world, and some effects of
this
are nutrition and
low
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a low
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level of
education
,
and
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apply
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some possible solutions are offering more
job
opportunities and
havign
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having
high-
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high
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job
salary
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salaries
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, so people will have
the
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apply
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money
to pay for their
children
basic necessities.
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