Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.
This
essay will talk about one
of the problems that is
happening in many countries, that not much
students in Change the quantifier
many
universities
that
choose Correct pronoun usage
apply
science
subjects. The way each students
think Change to a singular noun
student
in
Change preposition
about
chooisng
Correct your spelling
choosing
the
major in Correct article usage
a
universities
Fix the agreement mistake
university
is
usually Unnecessary verb
apply
vary
. Some might choose their major because Correct subject-verb agreement
varies
one
impactful event that Change preposition
of one
have ever
happened in their life and Wrong verb form
has
one
might choose specific
major because their relatives Correct article usage
a specific
was
in that major, or even Change the verb form
were
one
might choose major
randomly because they do not know which major to choose. In Correct article usage
a major
this
essay, there will be explained some possible reasons that is
specific major only has small
amount of students Add an article
a small
that
is
choosing.
Change the verb form
are
Science
subjects is
Change the verb form
are
one
of the least favoured or chosen major
in Fix the agreement mistake
majors
universities
in some countries. The possible causes are including
the thought of lower demand in Wrong verb form
include
such
major in working places
. As an example in Indonesia, science
major usually only has places
to work in research labs, which are rare in Indonesia, or teaching places
, such
as schools, academy
, or Fix the agreement mistake
academies
universities
, that might requires
Change the verb form
require
higher
degree to do so, and only Add an article
a higher
small
part of certain factory industries.
Correct article usage
a small
This
phenomenon might as well have some effects for
certain individuals, Change preposition
on
such
as human and resource development in certain offices, that they might only have narrower
choice of workers or Add an article
a narrower
the narrower
appliciants
that might not all meet the requirements of the applications.
Correct your spelling
applicants
Besides
the effects on individual
, it might Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
also
affecting
the whole society, which can be caused Change the verb form
affect
be affecting
initially
because of the limited human resources that
is
specialized in Change the verb form
are
science
subjects. It possibly can effecting
on stopping production in certain work fields or Change the verb form
effect
be effecting
places
because of the shortages.
In conclusion, even though the carreer
choice of the Correct your spelling
career
science
major might seem limited, but
it Correct word choice
apply
is still has
its importance for the limited choice Change the verb form
still has
that is
there.Submitted by vanadia on
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear logical structure, with ideas presented in a random manner rather than a cohesive and organized argument. The introduction and conclusion are present, but they do not adequately present and sum up the key points of the discussion. Paragraphs need to have clear central ideas that are developed logically.
task achievement
The task is partially addressed as the reasons for the problem are mentioned, but without detailed discussion or clear examples. Effects on society are noted but not explored in depth. The essay does not fully cover all parts of the prompt, lacking specific examples and failing to develop ideas comprehensively. There's a need to fully respond to the task by providing a balanced discussion of causes and effects with clear examples and detailed exploration.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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