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The percentage of 3 types of crimes: car theft, house burglary & street robbery in England & Wales from 1970 to 2015

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The linear graph shows the spread of 3 different
crime
 types:
car
theft
, house burglary and
street
robbery
, in England and
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Wales
 over a fourty five years
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period
 from 1970 to 2015.
Overall
, both
car
theft
 and house burglary
eperienced
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experienced
 an increase through the given periods with fluctuations during the time,
while
street
robbery
 did not show a noticeable change
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 its spread. In 1970, the most frequent
type
 of
crime
 was
car
theft
 with around 0.4%,
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followed
 by
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nearly
merely
 0.3% house burglary and
then
 0.1%
street
robbery
.
Car
theft
 increased gradually to arrive
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 peak of 1.4% in 1985 and decreased to 0.8%
at
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 2000. Meanwhile, the second most frequent
type
 of
crime
 started
with
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 0.3%
at
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 1970
raising
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 to arrive
0.5
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% in 1990 and dropped gradually to
nearlly
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nearly
 0.4%
at the end
 of the surveyed period.
Street
robbery
, the least frequent
crime
type
, started and ended with the same frequency of nearly 0.1% with fluctuations noticed in
this
type
 of
crime
.
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To fully achieve the task, it is important to present a comprehensive response to the prompt, including specific data to support your summaries. Your task achievement would improve by providing more precise figures and comparisons rather than approximate percentages and by analyzing the trend for each crime more comprehensively.

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