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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the rate of different age groups in the
years
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 2000 and 2050 in two various countries Yemen and Italy.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that adults who are 15-59
years
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 old
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people contain
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 the majority of others, except Yemen's population in 2000.
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, as can be seen from the figure, one noticeable future in the data is that
people
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 who were 0-14
years
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lived
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old lived
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 in Yemen arranged half of all inhabitants in 2000,
whereas
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 in 2050 15-59
years
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 of
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mature will be 57.3 %.
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, the proportion of 60+
years
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 older
people
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 will be increased slightly.
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, looking at more details
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chart nearly 62% of residents were 15-59
years
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 old,
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 it will fall to approximately 46% in 2050 in Italy.
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, 60+
years
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 of
people
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 will be doubled from 2000 to 2050. The proportion of 0-14
years
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also
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 decreases during a 50-year period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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