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The plan below shows the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now.

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The diagrams illustrate some changes in the village of
Pebbleton
 20 years ago and at present.
Overall
, the village has changed considerably with seven new features including houses, a footpath, a footbridge, a community centre, flats, a children’s playground and tennis courts in the second diagram. A deep analysis of the second map provided reveals there are three new houses to be built.
In addition
, the old fort in the northwest of
Pebbleton
 is replaced by a children’s playground. Other facilities that have been added are a community centre in between houses and a children’s playground. As can be seen in the new map, it is noticeable that a tennis court was built beside the lighthouse lane in the centre of
Pebbleton
. Meanwhile, a film studio in the southwest is replaced by the flats and there is a newly constructed footpath and a footbridge connecting to the school on the Coast Road near the river bank located in the south of
Pebbleton
.
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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, ensure that your essay is well-organised, with clear paragraphs and for each idea or change introduced, use linking words or phrases effectively to create flow. Consider adding a concluding paragraph to summarise the changes.
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To improve task achievement, expand your coverage of the visual information given. Offer comparisons where relevant and provide more detailed descriptions for each of the changes. A conclusion summarising the overall changes is also missing which could consolidate the essay's content.

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