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Tarnagul is a small town near Melbourne. The maps show the town's development over a period of time.

Tarnagul is a small town near Melbourne. The maps show the town's development over a period of time.
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The maps illustrate how a rural
area
 around Melbourne namely Tarnagul has developed over a hundred years.
Overall
, there was considerable growth
to
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 all of the features
although
 there will be an unused
area
 in 2000. From 1900 to 1950 there was empty land in the east that was constructed into the packing sheds.
In contrast
, in the middle of the map, the
oranges
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 field was expanded and substituted the
mandarins
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area
.
Moreover
, the town
area
 became larger in the next 50 years followed by
replacement
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 of dairy
into
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 fields of lemons and grapefruit
in
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 the west side. In the
last
 period of time, 2000, it showed improvement on the right side by the creation of a commercial
area
 that consisted of a craft market and a tourist shop.
Furthermore
, the local museum was replacing the packing sheds and removing the tracks in
this
area
. Next to the tourist shop, a new park was built
while
 the
oranges
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area
had been
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 demolished. The reduction of the town
area
 accompanied by the change of fruit fields (lemons and grapefruit) became a wildlife sanctuary.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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