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The chart represents data about unemployment rates in two countries

The chart represents data about unemployment rates in two countries
The chart represents data about unemployment rates in two countries including the US and Japan for a six-year period from March 1993 to the same month in 1999. From an
overall
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 perspective, the discussed topic increased in Japan from 2.5 to 5 per cent but it declined from 7 to 5 per cent in the US. Looking at details, both dot and line diagrams which are related to the US and Japan, respectively, not only do not show
shrap
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shape
 changes but
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 give
perminant
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permanent
 regression information in
work force
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 changes. It
shoud
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should
 be mentioned that some noises were during the time period,
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, they show steady trends.
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 the chart, the thing to point out is that both countries did not show significant
different
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 and they had equal unemployment
rate
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rates
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 in the endpoint.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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